I like the way you control this topic discussion by focusing on "attitude" and I can clearly see your overall organization.
I'm confused though by the following group of sentences:
" For the former one, they will be “friendly” to the environment, which means they will not do the activities that are harmful to the ecosystem. Nonetheless, the later one would not care of being “friendly” to the environment or not. Firstly, being the environmentalists, they will minimize the use of the non-biodegradable materials such as plastic bags."
One problem is the spelling of the word "latter." But a more disgruntling problem is the way the sentences don't flow together. Do you see the difficulty for the reader here?
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I like the way you control this topic discussion by focusing on "attitude" and I can clearly see your overall organization.
I'm confused though by the following group of sentences:
" For the former one, they will be “friendly” to the environment, which means they will not do the activities that are harmful to the ecosystem. Nonetheless, the later one would not care of being “friendly” to the environment or not. Firstly, being the environmentalists, they will minimize the use of the non-biodegradable materials such as plastic bags."
One problem is the spelling of the word "latter." But a more disgruntling problem is the way the sentences don't flow together. Do you see the difficulty for the reader here?
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